Reflection


Memoir- This was our first assignment. It was to write an essay about a memory or something that happened to us. I wrote about the first time i tried to jump a ramp on my bike.
Nature Essay- During this essay we were learning about Emerson and Thoreau and how they were transparent eyeballs. We were also learning about Transcendentalism and how we related to it. We went out to the woods to become transparent eyeballs just like them. This essay was an account of our experiences in the woods. We had to have one quote from Emerson and one from Thoreau in our essay.

From this class i have learned that
a) you have to have a good introduction and AGD in your writing
b) try to use active voice in your writing
c) Have a good conclusion that summarizes they key points and ends with a clincher sentence.

Revisions
In my memoir i needed to revise because i used a lot of numbers and i didn't spell them out. I learned from Mrs. Turner that when you are writing, numbers one to ninety nine need to be written out. I also used a lot of passive voice in my memoir. I still have a few passive voice sentences in that piece but Mrs. Turner Highlighted them and i was able to change most of them to active voice.

In my nature essay i needed to revise my introduction because i didnt have a thesis statement. I needed to revise my conclusion because it was short and terrible. I failed to summmarize the key points in my paper before bringing it to a close. I posted the nature essay with Mrs. Turner's comments on there but it has already been revised.

Learn From Others
1) I Learned from Brooke that it helps to have good organization in your piece and also using big words makes you sound really smart. Maybe i should invest in a thesaurus. http://www.brookeworks.blogspot.com
2) I learned from one of Elizabeth Baker's pieces that it helps you understand if the writer uses a lot of details and describes the situation in the story really well. Http://www.ebthatsme.blogspot.com
3) I learned from Erika Verbeck That it is easy to understand a paper if it has many examples to illustrate what the writer is trying to say. Http://www.ErikaVerbeck.blogspot.com